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[zinzin_xx]

In this topic, I cannot come up with 3 reasons to re-phrase and put it in the introduction.

Topic: It is generally believe that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and other are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Ability of people is a topic of discussion with quite a few arguments concerning about whether certain talents are given when people are born in the first time or people can be trained to become aptitude. I am strongly believe that people can become geniuses if they are received deep trainings since they are children. Following are further discussions of such an opinion.

Firstly, aptitudes can be formed though profound directions and completely practices. For example, a person when being a child, he were trained by a really great instructor with a lot of practices such as running 6 to 7 hours per day or doing more physical activities. As a result, he obtains more experience through each day, and will become an excellent athletic in the future.

Secondly, motivation and interesting in sport or music also play important roles to make become good sport person or professional musician without inborn talents. For instance, a girl who is enjoyable in playing guitar, she just plays it for an entertainment, and feels excited in the melody. This leads to fully practice every day and more songs are composed which can result in successful musician in the future

Lastly, inborn talents just help people take short time to be successful in specific fields than normal people. If person has a talent in playing piano, he only takes one day to learn how to play one song while normal people have to take one week to be like him. Moreover, although someone has great capability in playing soccer, he is not interested in this sport and leads to the fact that he will not try to play or practice so he cannot be a professional player. This means talent is not useful.

In brief, there might be various opinions about talents in different situations. However, the above-mentioned discussions have led a confirmation that people can be the experts if they have enough practice and profound directions without any innate intelligences.

[Bear Lac Loi]

In this topic, I cannot come up with 3 reasons to re-phrase and put it in the introduction.

Topic: It is generally believe that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and other are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Ability of people is a topic of discussion with quite a few arguments concerning about whether certain talents are given when people are born in the first time or people can be trained to become aptitude (simplify the sentence). I am strongly believe that people can become geniuses if deep trainings since they are children. Following are further discussions of such an opinion.

Firstly, aptitudes can be formed though profound directions and completely practices. For example, a person when being a child, he were trained by a really great instructor with a lot of practices such as running 6 to 7 hours per day or doing more physical activities. As a result, he obtains more experience through each day, and will become an excellent athletic in the future.

Secondly, motivation and interesting in sport or music also play important roles to make become good sport person or professional musician without inborn talents. For instance, a girl who is enjoyable in playing guitar, she just plays it for an entertainment, and feels excited in the melody. This leads to fully practice every day and more songs are composed which can result in successful musician in the future

Lastly, inborn talents just help people take short time to be successful in specific fields than normal people. If person has a talent in playing piano, he only takes one day to learn how to play one song while normal people have to take one week to be like him. Moreover, although someone has great capability in playing soccer, he is not interested in this sport and leads to the fact that he will not try to play or practice so he cannot be a professional player (translate this sentence directly to Vietnamese and see if it makes sense). This means talent is not useful.

In brief, there might be various opinions about talents in different situations. However, the above-mentioned discussions have led a confirmation that people can be the experts if they have enough practice and profound directions without any innate intelligences.

--- o0o ---

Zinzin,

Try your best to come up with an outline and format the introduction and the conclusion as discussed. You cannot skip them because you say you do not know how. Skipping what you do not know is not the main purpose of practicing. If you cannot come up with the outline or the term for the reasons or your opinions then change the reasons or the opinions.

There are mistakes in the red text. You need to figure what the mistakes are and fix them.

Good luck.

[zinzin_xx]

Dear, thầy Bear,

This is my correction about above essay.

Topic: It is generally believe that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and other are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Ability of people is a topic of discussion with quite a few arguments concerning about whether certain talents are given when people are born in the first. I trongly believe that people can become experts because of deep trainings since they are children. Following are further discussions of such an opinion.

Firstly, aptitudes can be formed though profound directions and complete practices. For example, a person who was trained when he was a child by a really great instructor with a lot of practices such as running 6 to 7 hours per day or doing more physical activities. As a result, he obtains more experience through each day, and will become an excellent athletic in the future.

Secondly, motivation and interest in sport or music also play important roles to make people become good sport person or professional musician without inborn talents. For instance, a girl who enjoy playing guitar, she just plays it for an entertainment, and feels excited in the melody. This leads to full practice every day which can result in successful musician in the future

Lastly, inborn talents just help people take less time to be successful in specific fields. If person has a talent in playing piano, he only takes one day to learn how to play one song while normal people have to take one week to be like him. Moreover, although a person has great capability in playing soccer, he is not interested in this sport and leads to the fact that he will not try to play or practice to achieve the succeed.

In brief, there might be various opinions about talents in different situations. However, the above-mentioned discussions have led a confirmation that people can be the experts if they have enough practice and profound directions without any innate intelligence.


---- And this is other my essay.

Topic: Telling a white lie (a well-intentioned untruth) is better than giving bad news.” Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write an essay of about 300 words with good reasons and examples to express your opinion.

When it comes to telling the truth, there has always been a heated debate concerning about whether telling a white lie or giving bad news bring more benefits. In my opinion, I strongly believe that tell a well-intentioned untruth is better in most of circumstances because it can prevent from negative feelings, encourage people and show your respect to others.

Firstly, tell a white-lie can help people avoid some negative feeling. For example, in hospital, a patient is in really bad situation with lower percentage of surviving, doctor always tell him some lies about his health in this case in order not to bring him bad feelings and thinking which leads to unfortunate consequences. Instead, giving him some positive emotions can sometimes achieve good results than expectation.

Secondly, avoiding saying bad reality might encourage people doing which is thought a possibility. For instance, a person who want to become an artist without abilities in painting; in this situation, this person can achieve succeed in art in the future if he receive encouragements and motivations from the teacher. In the other words, if the teacher tells the truth about his ability, this student immediately gives up his dream.

Lastly, telling the intentioned untruth sometime show our respect to others. For example, although my family feels unpleased about presence of guesses, we have to show well behavior to them without bad reaction and rude saying. By doing that, we are not only keeping the good relationships but also avoiding bad consequences.

In conclusion, there might be various opinions about this topic in different circumstances. However, I hold the opinion that telling the white-lies bring more advantages than telling the bad information because of preventing from negative effects, encouraging people and expressing the respect.

[Bear Lac Loi]

Dear, thầy Bear,

This is my correction about above essay.

Topic: It is generally believe that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and other are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Ability of people is a topic of discussion with quite a few arguments concerning about whether certain talents are given when people are born in the first. I trongly believe that people can become experts because of deep trainings since they are children. Following are further discussions of such an opinion.

Firstly, aptitudes can be formed though profound directions and complete practices. For example, a person who was trained when he was a child by a really great instructor with a lot of practices such as running 6 to 7 hours per day or doing more physical activities. As a result, he obtains more experience through each day, and will become an excellent athletic in the future.

Secondly, motivation and interest in sport or music also play important roles to make people become good sport person or professional musician without inborn talents. For instance, a girl who enjoy playing guitar, she just plays it for an entertainment, and feels excited in the melody. This leads to full practice every day which can result in successful musician in the future

Lastly, inborn talents just help people take less time to be successful in specific fields. If person has a talent in playing piano, he only takes one day to learn how to play one song while normal people have to take one week to be like him. Moreover, although a person has great capability in playing soccer, he is not interested in this sport and leads to the fact that he will not try to play or practice to achieve the succeed.

In brief, there might be various opinions about talents in different situations. However, the above-mentioned discussions have led a confirmation that people can be the experts if they have enough practice and profound directions without any innate intelligence.

Ability of people is a topic of discussion with quite a few arguments concerning about whether certain talents are given when people are born in the first (redundant. Delete “in the first”). I trongly (spelling) believe that people can become experts because of deep (extensive, proper, rigorous) trainings since they are (were) children. Following are further discussions of such an opinion.

Firstly, aptitudes can be formed though profound directions (proper guidance) and complete (? – Delete complete) practices. For example, a person who was trained when he was a child by a really (No value added. Delete: really) great instructor with a lot of practices such as running 6 to 7 hours per day or doing more physical activities (what is the part of speech of “a person”?). As a result, he obtains more experience through (extraneous. Delete “through”) each day, (delete the comma) and will become an excellent athletic in the future.

Secondly, motivation and interest in sport or music also play important roles to make (better: in making) people become good sport person (better: a good [or great] athletic) or (add: a) professional musician without inborn talents. For instance, a girl who enjoy playing guitar, (semicolon) she just plays it for an entertainment, (delete the comma) and feels excited in the melody (what is the part of speech of “a girl”?). This leads to full practice every day which can result in successful musician in the future. (better: This results in extensive practice [or, hours of practice] every day which will turn her into a successful musician in the future.)

Lastly, inborn talents just help people take less time to be successful (take less time to achieve success) in specific fields. If person has a talent in playing piano, he only takes one day to learn how to play one song while normal people have to take one week to be like him (better: while a normal person may require one week). Moreover, although a person has great capability (ability) in playing soccer, he is not interested in this sport and leads to the fact that he will not try to play or practice to achieve the succeed. (better: On the other hand, if a talented person is not interested in practicing or training, he or she may not achieve success.)

In brief, there might be various opinions about talents in different situations. However, the above-mentioned (above) discussions have led a (have led to the) confirmation that people can be the experts if they have enough practice and profound directions (guidance) without any innate intelligence.

[Bear Lac Loi]

Dear, thầy Bear,

---- And this is other my essay.

Topic: Telling a white lie (a well-intentioned untruth) is better than giving bad news.” Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write an essay of about 300 words with good reasons and examples to express your opinion.

When it comes to telling the truth, there has always been a heated debate concerning about whether telling a white lie or giving bad news bring more benefits. In my opinion, I strongly believe that tell a well-intentioned untruth is better in most of circumstances because it can prevent from negative feelings, encourage people and show your respect to others.

Firstly, tell a white-lie can help people avoid some negative feeling. For example, in hospital, a patient is in really bad situation with lower percentage of surviving, doctor always tell him some lies about his health in this case in order not to bring him bad feelings and thinking which leads to unfortunate consequences. Instead, giving him some positive emotions can sometimes achieve good results than expectation.

Secondly, avoiding saying bad reality might encourage people doing which is thought a possibility. For instance, a person who want to become an artist without abilities in painting; in this situation, this person can achieve succeed in art in the future if he receive encouragements and motivations from the teacher. In the other words, if the teacher tells the truth about his ability, this student immediately gives up his dream.

Lastly, telling the intentioned untruth sometime show our respect to others. For example, although my family feels unpleased about presence of guesses, we have to show well behavior to them without bad reaction and rude saying. By doing that, we are not only keeping the good relationships but also avoiding bad consequences.

In conclusion, there might be various opinions about this topic in different circumstances. However, I hold the opinion that telling the white-lies bring more advantages than telling the bad information because of preventing from negative effects, encouraging people and expressing the respect.

When it comes to telling the truth, there has always been a heated debate concerning about whether telling a white lie or giving bad news bring more benefits. In my opinion, I strongly believe that tell a well-intentioned untruth is better in most of circumstances because it can prevent from negative feelings, encourage people (comma) and show your respect to others.

Firstly, tell a white-lie can help people avoid some negative feeling. For example, in hospital, a patient is in really bad situation with lower percentage of surviving, doctor always tell him some lies about his health in this case in order not to bring him bad feelings and thinking which leads to unfortunate consequences. Instead, giving him some positive emotions can sometimes achieve good results than expectation.

Secondly, avoiding saying bad reality might encourage people doing which is thought a possibility. For instance, a person who want to become an artist without abilities in painting; in this situation, this person can achieve succeed in art in the future if he receive encouragements and motivations from the teacher. In the other words, if the teacher tells the truth about his ability, this student immediately gives up his dream.

Lastly, telling the intentioned untruth sometime show our respect to others. For example, although my family feels unpleased about presence of guesses, we have to show well behavior to them without bad reaction and rude saying. By doing that, we are not only keeping the good relationships but also avoiding bad consequences.

In conclusion, there might be various opinions about this topic in different circumstances. However, I hold the opinion that telling the white-lies bring more advantages than telling the bad information because of preventing from negative effects, encouraging people (comma) and expressing the respect.

--- o0o ---

Hello Zinzin,

There is something wrong or unusual about the text that was marked red. Please revise.

[zinzin_xx]

Dear thầy Bear,

There are somethings which I dont understand.

*For example, a person who was trained when he was a child by a really (No value added. Delete: really) great instructor with a lot of practices such as running 6 to 7 hours per day or doing more physical activities (what is the part of speech of “a person”?).
-I didn't understand how come you said "No value added".
-I also didn't understand how come you said " (what is the part of speech of “a person”?) ". In my sentence, a suject is "a person" so a verb is " was" - passive voice

*As a result, he obtains more experience through (extraneous. Delete “through”) each day: I meant " qua mỗi ngày", so I used " through".

*For instance, a girl who enjoy playing guitar, (semicolon) she just plays it for an entertainment, (delete the comma) and feels excited in the melody (what is the part of speech of “a girl”?). --- a subject is "a girl" so a verb are "plays" and "feels". What's wrong in this sentence?

*Lastly, inborn talents just help people take less time to be successful (take less time to achieve success) in specific fields. -- "take less time to achieve success" is better way or my way has any grammatical mistakes?

*Moreover, although a person has great capability (ability) in playing soccer, -- I did read some documents in the Internet about the difference between "ability" and "capability" but I was still confused.


This is my revision of second essay. There are some red sentences which I don't know what mistakes are.

When it comes to telling the truth, there has always been a heated debate concerning about whether telling a white lie or giving bad news brings more benefits. In my opinion, I strongly believe that telling a well-intentioned untruth is better in most circumstances because it can prevent people from negative feelings, encourage them, and show their respect to others.

Firstly, telling a white-lie can help people avoid some negative feelings. For example, in hospital, a patient is in really bad situation with lower percentage of surviving, doctor always tell him some lies about his health in this case in order not to bring him bad feelings and thinking which lead to unfortunate consequences. Instead, giving him some positive emotions can sometimes achieve good results than expectation.

Secondly, avoiding saying bad reality might encourage people doing what is thought a possibility. For instance, a person who want to become an artist without abilities in painting; in this situation, this person can achieve succeed in art in the future if he receives encouragements and motivations from the teacher. In other words, if the teacher tells the truth about his ability, this student might immediately give up his dream.

Lastly, telling an intentioned untruth sometime show our respect to others. For example, although my family feels unpleased about presence of the guess, we have to show well behavior to them without bad reaction and rude saying. By doing that, we are not only keeping the good relationships but also avoiding bad consequences.

In conclusion, there might be various opinions about this topic in different circumstances. However, I hold the opinion that telling white-lies brings more advantages than telling the bad information because people can avoid negative effects, have motivations to do what they want , and express the respect.

[Bear Lac Loi]

Good job, Zinzin. I am glad you have paid attention by asking questions. Let me answer these questions now and work on your revised essay later.

Dear thầy Bear,

There are somethings which I dont understand.

*For example, a person who was trained when he was a child by a really (No value added. Delete: really) great instructor with a lot of practices such as running 6 to 7 hours per day or doing more physical activities (what is the part of speech of “a person”?).
-I didn't understand how come you said "No value added".
-I also didn't understand how come you said " (what is the part of speech of “a person”?) ". In my sentence, a suject is "a person" so a verb is " was" - passive voice

“No value added” means it does not help much in clarifying your idea. A really great instructor is after all, a great instructor. Adding “really” to it is just a form of exaggeration.

In the sentence, “A person who was trained when he was a child by a great instructor with lots of practices such as running 6 to 7 hours per day or doing more physical activities,” the subject of the verb “was trained” is “who”, and the subject of the second verb “was” is “he”. Therefore, “a person” is just standing there by itself. It has no functions, which is wrong.

*As a result, he obtains more experience through (extraneous. Delete “through”) each day: I meant " qua mỗi ngày", so I used " through".

Usually, we do not use a preposition in this case. We can say either, “He obtains more experience each day,” or “Each day, he obtains more experience.”

Here are few more examples when we do or do not use the preposition:

No preposition: Zinzin goes to school each day. (Not: on each day)
With preposition: Zinzin goes to school on weekday.

No preposition: She has breakfast every morning. (Not: in every morning)
With preposition: She has breakfast in the morning.

No preposition: She graduated from high school last May. (Not: in last May)
With preposition: She graduated from high school in May

No preposition: Will you have time to go shopping this weekend? (Not: on this weekend)
With preposition: Will you have time to go shopping on weekends?

No preposition: Please sit here. (Not: on here. However you can also say “Please sit over here or up here.”)
With preposition: Please sit on this chair.

*For instance, a girl who enjoy playing guitar, (semicolon) she just plays it for an entertainment, (delete the comma) and feels excited in the melody (what is the part of speech of “a girl”?). --- a subject is "a girl" so a verb are "plays" and "feels". What's wrong in this sentence?

Similar to the previous explanation, “who” is the subject of “enjoys” and “she” is the subject of “plays” and “feels”. That will leave “a girl” to be functionless.

*Lastly, inborn talents just help people take less time to be successful (take less time to achieve success) in specific fields. -- "take less time to achieve success" is better way or my way has any grammatical mistakes?

It is just a different way to say it.

*Moreover, although a person has great capability (ability) in playing soccer, -- I did read some documents in the Internet about the difference between "ability" and "capability" but I was still confused.

Capability ám chỉ về khả năng hay trình độ để làm một việc gì đó.
When a boy has the capability to play soccer, he is capable of running and kicking the ball. It is not necessary that he is good at playing soccer.

Ability ám chỉ về tài năng để làm một việc gì đó.
When the boy has the ability to play soccer, he has the talent or skills in playing soccer.