Just praticing to type in English

[di13]

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[iPropose]

(1) Hi di13, I hope I am not too strict nor overwhelming you with the corrections. It is wonderful to see you trying to express yourself in writing. Keep it up, and I'm sure you will be better day by day. I am not that great with grammar and explanation, but I read from a reader perspective. I hope you don't mind. @};-

- Jason was AN FBI. (Here you would use “an” because we pronounce “F” as “eff”, which in this case is a vowel sound.)
- He caught a ton (exactly one ton? When you use “a”, it specifies that it’s in the exact amount of quantity of “one”. If you want to use exaggeration here, omit “a” and use “tons” instead) of bad people that sold illegal drug (“drugs”, because immediately after this you start listing a few drug names, not just one) like cocaine, nicotine, et cetera …
- Jason risked his life for his job; therefore, his paycheck is very big. (I hope you see the mismatch here. You used the past tense for one part of the sentence, and the present tense for the latter. Your tenses in a sentence must be parallel and consistent, unless you have a good reason such as “cause-and-effect” to change the tense in the middle of the sentence. I don’t see that here. Just a side note here, once you start telling a story, you need to know what tense the story will be in. Is Jason still an FBI or is he already retired? From the start of your writing, I had the impression that Jason is not an FBI anymore. However, suddenly you switched from past to present, I’m a bit confused now of his status.)
- Jason also wins big bucks from horse race because his close friend works in there. (“his close friend works THERE” would be just fine. You don’t necessarily need to say he works IN there, for “in there” would physically mean “he works inside that building”.)
- His friend gives him some INSIDE INFORMATION and good tips so that Jason KNOWS which horse runS fast that day. (You don’t need to use “will know” here so that the tenses in the sentence remain the same, and thus it is easier to understand)
- SHOUD I believe him? (When you want to show that you are skeptical, shorten your sentence and avoid using OR in the same sentence. Using “or” will have them start questioning themselves and might not see your perspective.)
- MAYBE he IS just baloney?
- He was retired when he was forty-five years old. (He RETIRED or he WAS retired by the FBI? Remember to make the subject as active as possible unless it is necessary to use passive voice.)
- How many people out there WOULD STILL have muscles with six packs at this age?
- How many of you out there WOULD have millions OF U.S dollars for back up?
- Can I ape from him? No, I cannot because I am so weak. (Ahh, I see that you’re trying to use a new word. However, “ape” as a verb meaning “to copy something or someone badly and unsuccessfully”. Are you sure you still want to use the word “ape” in this sentence now?)
- I cannot even kill the ant. If I step outside, the wind will blow me always. (I don’t see how you “mentally” cannot kill the ant but the wind will be able to blow you away “physically”. It’s very nice to use comparison in your writing, however, try using the same kind of analogy rather than two things that are impossible to compare.)

[di13]

iPropose @};- Thanks sis. for correct grammar/vocabulary. I will rewrite it sometime tomorrow. My purpose is to improve in writting. I love someone that correct grammar for me @};-

[di13]

I love someone that correct grammar for me = I appreciate someone that correct grammar for me hehe viết hoài sai hoài ta :)

[iPropose]

(2) Hi Di13,
I once read this sentence, "True wealth cannot be found in your bank account. It can only be found in those you call friends." It's true that if you save your money penny by penny, eventually you'll be a millionaire. And it is true that if you don't use your money wisely, you'll end up somewhere under a bridge eventually. However, like the sentence above, your true wealth is not determined by the money, but it is many other important things in your life, that makes you who you are, and that's your true value. I can only see that you have a quite ... sarcastic (if not strictly bitter) personality and view about life from the way you use your words. Just remember that, if you will it, you will have it. :)

- Di13, pay more attention on your Present tense. To form a question with present tense, you should use “Do/Does” to begin your sentence instead of “Are/Is”.
- The date Sandy was born, Sandy cut her own hair. (This is a little bit exaggerated, how can she cut her own hair when she was just born).
- Her hands are shaking and her eyes are blurring. Sandy cannot cuts her hair by herself anymore.
- Sandy went to the salon and asked receptionist OF how much for A hair cut.
- The receptionist replied, “Twenty dollars for hair cut includING shampoo.” Sandy rolled her eyes and left.
- She doesn't want to spend money although she has millions OF dollar. (When you use “millions, or hundreds, or thousands” make sure to use OF if you want to indicate what it is.)
- Sòai IS an idiot that why Soai's credit cards’ BALANCES keep increasing. (Without the balance, I would think that she has more credit cards and not just the amount on the credit cards. It’s up to you to use what you mean to say.)

[tamtungtegieng]

Jason was an FBI "agent" (don't forget the noun "agent"). He caught a ton (questionable with "tons" due to its role as an adjective usually being of singular form, so would "numerous" be adequate?) of bad people that sold illegal drugs like("like" usually pertains to a "one to one" comparison, "such as" is perhaps more appropriate here) cocaine, nicotine et cetera …Jason risked his life for his job; therefore, his paycheck is very big (good use of the ";" but is this a "cause and effect"?; disjointly they are perfectly fine sentences, I would urge you to restate it however). Jason also wins big bucks from horse race because his close friend works "in"(not required) there. His friend gives him "some" (perhaps "inside" or nothing?) secrets and good tips so that Jason will know which horse "run fast that day" (keeping with the "cause and effect" theme, "horse will win" is more direct). Jason told me that he always has at least one million dollars in his saving account for back up. Do I believe him or not? Is he may be just baloney? He was retired when he was forty-five years old. At age sixty, Jason still goes to the gym six times per week. He looks very strong, healthy and tough. How many people out there those have muscles with six packs at this age? How many of you out there those have millions U.S dollars for back up? Can I ape from him? No, I cannot because I am so weak. I cannot even kill the ant. If I step outside, the wind will blow me always. (I agree with the remaining suggestions provided by Ipropose, and hesitate to add more concurrently)

Good luck on your quest :)

[di13]

tamtungtegieng, thanks for rewrote it for me hehehe oh !!! I mean thanks for corrected grammar (past tense ???)

Let me combine iPropose's "GC" and tamtungtegieng's "GC" together and I rewrite it again hehehe
1) Jason was an FBI agent.( "an" before a word beginning with a vowel sound ... Jason was a Federal Bureau of Investigation. Is "a" before a word beginning with a consonant sound?)
2) He caught tons/numerous of bad people that sold illegal drugs such as cocaine, nicotine et cetera ...( a ton, a dozen, a couple )
3) Jason risked his life for his job; however, his paycheck was very big. ( His paycheck have been paying very big ??? past, present and may continue in the future ??? paid in the past and extends in the present ... They are still paying him due to the contract. Present perfect tense? Past perfect tense? Future perfect tense? I forget the rule because I took basic grammar class many years ago. I rarely write in English. I think this is a good excuse hehehe no offense)
4) Jason also wins big bucks from horse race because his close friend works there.
5) His friend gives him inside secrets and good tips so that Jason knows which horse runs fast that day. ( Somehow I want to keep the word "secrets" there hehehe What if I give you a secret why that horse run slow that day? Because someone cut his toes too short, he feels uncomfortable hehehehe)
6) Should I believe him? (
7) May be he is just baloney?
8) How many people out there would still have muscles with six packs at this age?
9) How many of you out there would have millions of U.S dollars for back up?

When will I use the words "should" and "would" ? Dì13 take a break now. I need to go outside for fresh air. I will rewrite second paragraph sometime tomorrow. Opp !!! I mean sometime next week. Opp !!! I mean whenever I am in the mood hehehe Thanks again iPropose and tamtungtegieng @};-

purpose ==>>> grammar @};-

[tamtungtegieng]

I took Basic English Grammar ("basic" or "Basic" depends on whether the word was an actual part of the title for the class; your differentiation is required) class when I were ("was" is correct here, "if...were" requires a different condition; in this case with the explanation being a specific reference in time and condition it will be "if....was") in Lê Quí Đôn elementary school some where in Đà Nẵng, Vietnam. All of the students in my school must took ("must take" is correct here; your reference to a past time is understood here, besides "must" is an auxiliary verb which takes precedence throughout time and will combine with all other verbs in present-tense form) either English or French class. Some how my teacher made me "took"("take" due to "made" being past-tense and similar reasoning as previously stated) English over French class. The class was about forty minutes ("long" ??) twice per week. I felt sleep ("felt sleepy" or "fell asleep"...???) in the ("the" may be omitted depending on situation, this class only or other classes as well?) class all the time. I did not learn much then. All I heard my teacher said "that" ("were" instead of "that") subject plus verb then plus complement(?) is equal ("to") a sentence. After two semesters, I have known twenty-six ("letters of the alphabet", unless you learned 26 different "alphabets") alphabet, how to count from one to ("a") hundred and how to write simple sentences. Finally, I graduated from elementary school.

Good luck on your quest.:)

[di13]

tamtungtegieng, thanks @};-you are useful@};- Let me rewrite it.

1) I was in Lê Quí Đôn elementary school some where in Đà Nẵng, Vietnam.
2) All of the students in my school must take either English or French class
3) Some how my teacher made me take English over French class.
4) The class was about forty minutes long twice per week.
5) I felt sleepy/asleep in the English class all the time.( subject + verb + adjective = a sentene )
6) The subject plus the verb then plus the complement is equal to a sentence.
7) I have known twenty-six letters of the alphabet in English.
8) I have known how to count from one to a hundred.

Is there any more mistake that I make? I doubt it. Self correct vocabulary. Middle school instead of elementary school because sixth grade require to take either English or French class in Đà Nẵng,Vietnam. The school that where I attended.

It doesn't matter where we live. Vietnamese people live in Vietnam, Vietnamese people live in the U.S or Vietnamese people live in any other countries. No need to discriminate because we are all human being, we are all equal. I see a lot of children live in Vietnam speak English fluently where as some people live in U.S cannot. No offense !!! because I am not fluent in English too !!!

[tamtungtegieng]

I felt sleepy/asleep in the English class all the time
di13, try to reason to yourself why there is a difference of "felt sleepy" and "fell asleep"; it's the next logical step in your quest to improve yourself.


Is there any more mistake that I make?
How about this one, can you tell me what you think the mistake is? Hint: verb tense. Once you have discovered it, convince yourself of why English-Vietnamese translation requires such a minute exchange but a vast difference in context.

On a general note, I think we welcome ALMOST everyone here; with the key notion of help, understanding and continual improvement. Shall such purpose cease to exist, those individuals are less than welcome.

[di13]

Is there any more mistake that I have made?
Are there any more mistakes that I have made?

[tamtungtegieng]

Great job di13, wonderful; presently I'd like for you to understand the subtlety of the two sentences in question.
Is there any more mistake that I have made?
Are there any more mistakes that I have made? First off I have to declare both sentences are correct. However when you translate it into Vietnamese there's a little bit of a distinction we must make. Loosely translated we'll say the first sentence is "Toi co' bi. sai bat' ky` loi nao nua khong?";the latter being "Toi con sai nhieu loi khong?" Please bear in mind that structures such as article/countable and non-countable noun does not exist in Vietnamese, so it tends to be problematic when translating. To fully understand the significance we must look for it. Think of the former sentence as an emphasis on "of any kind", whether it be a grammar/spelling /spacing/ contextual mistake. The latter of the two sentences simply refers to multiple occurrences of one type (grammar in this case) of mistakes.

I hope it helps more than confusing you. If you understand this subtle fact you will easily translate between the two languages.

[tamtungtegieng]

Why you have a lot of money? (Why "do" you have a lot of money? vs why you have a lot of money!) Are you success in business?(Are you "successful" in business? vs Are you "succeeding" in business?)

She told me that she is the owner of two laundies("laundries" ...??). It locates ("it is located" or "they are located"???... remember grammatically they are both correct individually; I would choose "they" simply because you referred to her owning two laundries) in poor "neighborhood some" where "that"("neighborhoods where they") they cannot afford to buy a washing-machine. She is hired somone("she hired someone") to work for her. Every day she just stops by her laundries and collect money. She also signs checks to pay for("for" not required) her employees. She also told me that she paid one hundred thousand U.S dollars for someone to set up the laundry("laundromat"). Anyhow, I don't want to ask her in details. If she wants to talk, then I am listen("then I am listening" or "I will listen"). Then,("then," not required) later on she said. " You know how much I pay for my shoes? This pair of shoe is $1200 U.S dollars." I am not surprised. That pair of shoes look ("looks") like ninety-nine cents to me. It looks so simple.

Couple weeks later I saw her again. Her head was cover"ed" with "a" scarf. Her lip was swollen, her nose bruised, both sides of her ears and under chin had small scars. At first, I thought she got "in a" car accident. Then, I was suprised("surprised") that I saw her breasts get("got") bigger and her tummy get("got") smaller. Oh, I see. She got plastic surgery. She asked me. " What do you think? Am("Do" instead of "am") I look better?" She said that she picks("picked") the best doctor in town and paid him about fifty thousands of U.S dollars. She also said that "a" one hundred U.S dollars (singular "dollar" here because? please explain to yourself) for consultation to her is nothing.[/quote]

Please explain to yourself what the difference is for each case! I will help you as long as you write. I like your mentality di13, keep up and good luck :)

[di13]

Here is a hot tea for you tamtungtegieng~O)

1) Why you have a lot of money?
Have your parents give it to you?
Have you rob the bank?
2) Why do you have a lot of money?
What do you do to have a lot of money?
Are you a janitor?
Are you open your own business?
Are you successful in business?

3) Are you successful in business? (Successful is a adjective. Successful is having succeeded.)
4) Are you succeedingin business? (Succeeding is a ajective. Succeeding is following)

hey !!! I am not sure. hehehe I doubt it.

She told me that she is the owner of two laundries store. They are located in poor neighborhood where they cannot afford to buy a washing-machine. She hired somone to work for her. Every day she just stops by her laundries store and collect money. She also signs checks to pay her employees. She also told me that she paid one hundred thousand U.S dollars for someone to set up the laundromat. [laundry/laundromat are noun. Laundromat is self-service laundry. Laundry is workplace where clothes are washed and ironed.]. Anyhow, I don't want to ask her in details. If she wants to talk, then I am listening. Later on she said. " You know how much I pay for my shoes? This pair of shoe is $1200 U.S dollars." I am not surprised. That pair of shoes looks like ninety-nine cents to me. It looks so simple.

Couple weeks later I saw her again. Her head was covered with a scarf. Her lip was swollen, her nose bruised, both sides of her ears and under chin had small scars. At first, I thought she got in a car accident. Then, I was surprised that I saw her breasts got bigger and her tummy got smaller. Oh, I see. She got plastic surgery. She asked me. " What do you think? Do I look better?" She said that she picked the best doctor in town and paid him about fifty thousands of U.S dollars. She also said that a one hundred U.S dollar [singular "dollar" here because a hundred]for consultation to her is nothing.

I have to take a break. I'll be back and rewrite it again hehehehe It is still have some mistakes. Feel free to correct aynone. @};-

[di13]

Self correct mistake.

1) It is still have some mistakes ==> It still has some mistakes. The paragraph above still has some mistakes.

tám@};-
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giếng@};-

I saw her felt into the well. I ran over try to catch her, but I missed it. All I had to do is to grab the rope and pulled her up. I took her to the emergency room. The physician said. "She is fine."

[di13]

1) Sandy went to the salon and asked receptionist of how much for a hair cut.
2) The receptionist replied, “Twenty dollars for hair cut including shampoo.” Sandy rolled her eyes and left.
3) She doesn't want to spend money although she has millions of dollar.
4a) Sòai is an idiot that why Soai's credit cards’ keep increasing. (yes, I still want to use this sentence hehehe)
4b) Sòai is an idiot that why Soai's credit cards’ balances keep increasing.

[tamtungtegieng]

1) Why you have a lot of money!
2) Why do you have a lot of money?

Sentence number one is NOT a question, it is an exclamation. It usually means there's an emphasis on "what reasons verify the existence of your wealth." Tam. dich: "nhung ly do nao ban co the xem nguoi do' la dau` co' " Day ko phai la cau hoi, ma la cau nhan manh. (sorry my Vietnamese is terrible when it comes to the accent mark, bear with me).
Sentence number two IS a question, and it must come with the "do" to be a grammatically correct question. You obviously understand the question, so there's no need to extend on the idea; there must be a "to be" verb in the question however.


3) Are you successful in business? (Successful is a adjective. Successful is having succeeded.)
4) Are you succeeding in business? (Succeeding is a adjective. Succeeding is following)
I want you to notice the role of both words in red, being of the same kind, namely adjective. The structure of the question is "Are you adjective in business?" "Are you success (noun) in business?" is not grammatically correct.


She told me that she is the owner of two laundries store.
With the use of "laundries" as a plural noun, it's unnecessary and incorrect to use another noun ("store") at the end. You may write it as: "She told me that she is the owner of two laundry stores" where "laundry" now plays the role of an adjective and "stores" being the plural noun.

They are located in poor neighborhood where they cannot afford to buy a washing-machine.
This sentence is a little bit tricky to understand due to the objectivity of the two instances of "they". The first "they" refers to the two "laundries" mentioned before. The second "they" refers to "customers without access to washing-machine". I would suggest rephrasing it as: "They are located in poor neighborhoods where many customers cannot afford to buy a washing machine"


She also told me that she paid one hundred thousand U.S dollars for someone to set up the laundromat. [laundry/laundromat are noun. Laundromat is self-service laundry. Laundry is workplace where clothes are washed and ironed.]Yes, your understanding of "laundry/laundromat" is correct. However I was asking for your clarification as to which word you want to choose. "Laundromat" itself is like a brand name used so often that it became a generic term; just like Vietnamese calling motorbikes as "Honda".

I am content with the remaining comments you posted, I sincerely hope you are keeping these mistakes in mind as you write more often. It will begin to shape the thought process as you write and hopefully reduce the number of errors. Good luck!:)

[tamtungtegieng]

1) It is still have some mistakes ==> It still has some mistakes. The paragraph above still has some mistakes.

Great self correction@};-, ultimately I wish for you to correct me and others. :)


I saw her felt into the well. I ran over try to catch her, but I missed it. All I had to do is to grab the rope and pulled her up. I took her to the emergency room. The physician said. "She is fine."Do you see a mistake in there? If you meant to say "I saw her FELL into the well", I would tell you that's also incorrect. Can you tell me why that would be? Why would it be correct to say "I saw her FALL into the well". Think of it in Vietnamese: "toi da~ thay' co ta da~ te' xuong' gieng'. " Interesting idea eh? How about the remaining mistakes, can you point them out? I hope you can pick them out when you stop playing poker. [-X#:-S8-} Oh, this well I fell into is one of an intellectual and spiritual nature, I may never recover from it; until then, you may or may not see me again :-?

[di13]

Thanks tám @};-

I saw her fall into the well. I ran over to try to catch her, but I missed it. All I had to do is grab the rope and pulled her up. I took her to the emergency room. The physician said, " She is fine."

[Rewrote by tám ]All of the students in my school must took ("must take" is correct here; your reference to a past time is understood here, besides "must" is an auxiliary verb which takes precedence throughout time and will combine with all other verbs in present-tense form) either English or French class.[tám]

Self correct mistake.

1) Her eyes and her lip are bigger than me. ==> Her eyes and her lips are bigger than mine.

di13
You do what you have to do. I'll vanish in the air anytime.

[Bear Lac Loi]

How do we know which decision is right?

Make the right decision can earn a million dollar or other way around. Sandy bought a piece of land somewhere on the highway. A year later, she hired some constructor to build the gas station. Total cost of expense is a million dollar. The gas station hadn’t ready to open, but someone offered two millions of U.S dollars to buy it. If Sandy sold it, she would have profited a million cash in her pocket. But, she thought. If she has been keeping it, she may earn more than that. Greedy’s normal as a human being the same thing with gambler. If someone goes to casino to play blackjack, poker … et cetera, they may win a thousand dollar. Would they stop playing it? No, they think that if they keep playing who know they may win another thousand dollar. Or, they may end up losing it all. It is kind of hard to predict what happen in the future. Decision is tough.


How do we know which decision is right?

Make (Making) the right decision can earn (one, a person, or you) a million dollar or (the) other way around. Sandy bought a piece of land somewhere on the (a) highway (some smaller subjects can be placed on a highway but not a piece of land. A piece of land can only be near, next to, or close to a highway). A year later, she hired some constructor (hired someone or some contractors) to build the (a) gas station. (The) total cost of expense (use either ‘the total cost’ or ‘the expense’ but not both) is (was) a million dollar(s). The gas station hadn’t (wasn’t?) ready to open, but someone offered (her) two millions of U.S dollars to buy it (or, ‘offered to buy it for two millions dollars’) (‘millions of US dollars,’ or ‘two million US dollar,’ but NOT ‘two millions of US dollars’). If Sandy sold it, she would have profited a million cash (a million dollars in cash) in her pocket (she can’t profit something in her pocket. She can only have $1M in her pocket, or she can pocket a profit of $1M). But, she thought. (A period here causes fragmented sentences error) If she has been keeping it, she may earn more than that (But she thought that if she kept the gas station, she might …). Greedy’s (Being greedy or greed) (is as) normal as a human being the same thing with gambler (could this be … ‘being greedy is the nature of a gambler’ or, ‘greed is a common human behavior’ or, ‘greed is common among gamblers?’). If someone goes to (a) casino to play blackjack, poker … et cetera, they may win a thousand dollar(s) (usage of ‘someone goes to …’ with ‘they may …’ is acceptable, but not preferable. Replace ‘someone’ with ‘people’ to make it sound better: ‘if people go to a casino to gamble and win one thousand dollars’). (,) Would they stop playing it? No, (a period here would be less confusing) they think that if they keep playing (,) who know(s) (,) they may win another thousand dollar(s). Or, they may end up losing it (if ‘it’ represents “a thousand dollars’, then it should be ‘them’) all. It is kind of hard to predict what happen(s) in the future. (Making) decision is tough.

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[iPropose]

Am I a bilgewater?
Last Sunday, Justinn Timberlakee asked me out on a date. – Can you tell the differences between “on the date” and “on a date”?

I refused to go because I was busy babysitting Angelian Joliee’s children. – When you write, try NOT using too many “to + infinitive”. That’s why we have “gerund”.

He has been calling me more than ten times per day. – Present perfect tense

Somehow I have disconnected my phone service since I have needed quiet moment. – What do you mean by “somehow”? Using “somehow” here makes the meaning in your sentence contradicting one another. “Somehow” = in a way or by some means which is not known or not stated. How can you not know why the phone is disconnected but you know that you needed a quiet moment?

I am neither saint nor angel, so I DO like someone who’s hot and sexy with a cute voice, but that is just the surface.

To me, personality is significant in a long-term companionship (or relationship). – You can use “company” here but it kind of means to me as a “short-term” rather than a “companion”.

Oh!!! I have not been completely honest. – To say that you are not honest in a writing like this would give the impression that you are not honest throughout your whole life. Your “Oh!!!” here is telling me that just for this moment you realized you haven’t been honest. Hence the correction.

How about between a beggar and a billionaire, do I treat each of them differently? – “A” meaning could be anyone; “The” is someone especially. Since you never mentioned either beggar or billionaire in your writing up until this point, you cannot point them out as “the”; they could be anyone. "Distinguish” is usually used for more positive idea rather than negatively. Sometimes using a simple word could really bring out the meaning of what you want to say better a fancy word.

Oh!!! Am I a liar?

Please do not believe me because it is fiction. – “It” or “This”? What’s “it”?

In another word, I gather some words from here and there, then I make it up sentences. – “Make up” or “make it up”?

I intentionally misspell the actors’ names so that they don’t have any evidence to take me to court. – You can use “actor” for both male and female art performers but not “actress”. I made some other changes to shorten your sentence. A long sentence does not mean that it is a good sentence. “To take someone to court” is better used than “to take someone to go to court”; and in some cases they give absolutely different meanings. Can you tell what the differences are?

Yes, I am a bilgewater. – Being a liar or a dreamer does not make you a bilge water. I’m guessing you meant to use it as “ca(.n ba~”, but your writing simply does not take you up to it yet. Perhaps you should try a different and more brutal approach. :-?

[iPropose]

[FONT=Calibri][SIZE=3]My mom’s friend saw me heavily cough then she gave me one of her medicine that’s big as pinkie.
My mom's friend saw me heavily coughing and she gave me one of her medicine that was as big as a pinkie.


She made me swallow it before bed time.
She told me I should take the medicine before bedtime. - Here in your original sentence, I have the feeling that your mom's friend is living with you. "Make" is an action verb that when you use it, (1) it is more forceful, (2) the reader (me) will have the picture that she is forcefully make you take the medicine before your bedtime.


One hour later the medicine absorbed to my body, and I got worse. After that, I had a hard time to breathe, and I could not talked.
One hour later the medicine absorbed to my body, and somehow I got worse. I had a hard time to breathe, and I could not talk. - Here I only have a few suggestions: (1) In the prior sentence you already use "later", therefore in the preceding sentence, "after that" is a redundancy. I know when your thought process from your brain to your fingers, much of the cohesion will not be there. Just remember to take a few minutes after you finish writing to read again and you'll be able to catch your own mistakes and correct them. (2) Verb after "could" should be in infinitive form without "to".


I had to sit all night for inhale and exhale easier.
I had to sit (up) all night for easier inhaling and exhaling. OR I heath to sit (up) all night to breathe easier (to inhale and exhale easier). [i]- (1)You can use "sit up" or just "sit" depends on how you want to use it. I normally use "sit up" or "sit straight up" so that the reader can easier visualize the condition. To simply sit is just not descriptive enough to me. (2) When you want to use a verb in its infinitive form, make sure that you might need to have "to" + verb-infinitive. If you choose to use "for" the verb(s) you will use preceding "for" should be in a gerund form.


I learn my lesson.
[i]Did you learn the lesson from the experience? Or are you still learning the lesson?

Great writing! I can see that you make fewer and fewer mistakes. Soon I'll be running out of job. :) Keep it up!

[di13]

Thanks BearLacLoi @};-& iPropose@};-

I will rewrite it whenever I have spare time.

[di13]

1) Last Sunday, Justinn Timberlakee asked me out on a date.
2) He has been calling me more than ten times per day.
3) I am neither saint nor angel, so I do like someone who’s hot and sexy with a cute voice, but that is just the surface.
4) To me, personality is significant in a long-term companionship.
5) How about between a beggar and a billionaire, do I treat each of them differently?
6) I intentionally misspell the actors’ names so that they don’t have any evidence to take me to court.


bilgewater and bilge water

bilgewater
n : pretentious or silly talk or writing
[syn: baloney (http://dict.vietfun.com/td?db=wn&word=baloney), boloney (http://dict.vietfun.com/td?db=wn&word=boloney),bosh (http://dict.vietfun.com/td?db=wn&word=bosh), drool (http://dict.vietfun.com/td?db=wn&word=drool), humbug (http://dict.vietfun.com/td?db=wn&word=humbug), taradiddle (http://dict.vietfun.com/td?db=wn&word=taradiddle), tarradiddle (http://dict.vietfun.com/td?db=wn&word=tarradiddle), tommyrot (http://dict.vietfun.com/td?db=wn&word=tommyrot), tosh (http://dict.vietfun.com/td?db=wn&word=tosh), twaddle (http://dict.vietfun.com/td?db=wn&word=twaddle)]

bilge water
noun
1.Nautical. bilge (http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=bilge) (def. 1d).
2.Also called bilge. (http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=bilge) Slang. foolish, worthless, or offensive talk or ideas; nonsense; rubbish.

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1)My mom's friend saw me heavily coughing and she gave me one of her medicine that was as big as a pinkie.
2) One hour later the medicine absorbed to my body, and somehow I got worse. I had a hard time to breathe, and I could not talk.
3) I had to sit up all night for easier inhaling and exhaling.
4) I had to sit up all night to breathe easier.

Thanks nguoi đẹp iPropose

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